As usual it took more than a couple of days to get this up, but I didn’t want to post it until I reached a stopping point I felt good with. This section briefly introduces an element of mystery in the overall story (big thanks to Matt H. for the idea). I’m working my way through page 18 right now, and I probably won’t post the rest until I finish out the issue, on or around page 23. I’ve made some progress on issue two which is going to cover some of the back story for DEREK and GRACE. Issue three will be big on excitement, and involve organized crime. I’ve got some ideas for the bigger events beyond that, but issues four and up are a bit nebulous at present. I hope people are enjoying it. Thanks for reading.
EXPRESS – #1 : Heavy
PANEL 1 (UPPER THIRD: 1/3 WIDE: FULL OVERLAP PANEL 2)
DEREK LOWE now wearing the grey jumpsuit and cap. Picks the photo up and studies it.
DEREK LOWE (To Himself)
Yeah, eleven will be fine. Vertical door bar is well polished no scuffs. Base plate has a one inch scratch toward the hinge end Lock at the base is a Wuxi. Time here is about 3:30 in the afternoon so it’ll be 5:30 in the morning there. I’ll wanna make sure I don’t hit any early risers. OK. Good to go.
PANEL 2 (FULL HEIGHT: DOUBLE WIDE)
High corner view of the WAREHOUSE; DEREK stands in front of the chalkboard(Left). Arrayed across the floor of the warehouse are 16 doors set into individual brick walls. Each door is different, and each door is numbered with spray paint stencil on plywood. GRACE has a hand truck and is walking toward the door marked 11.
PANEL 2 (CONTINUED)
NOTE: The DOORS
- Wooden House Interior – Single
- Wooden House Exterior – Single
- Wooden House Exterior – Double
- Wooden Office Interior – Single
- Wooden Office Interior – Double
- Metal House Exterior – Single
- Metal Office Exterior – Single
- Metal Office Exterior – Double
- Glass Home Sliding – Double
- Glass Home Storm – Single
- Glass Office Exterior – Single
- Glass Office Exterior – Double
- Glass Office Sliding – Double
- Wooden House Exterior Round Top – Single
- Wooden House Exterior Dutch – Single
- Wooden House Exterior Round Top: Half Height: Red – Single
PANEL 3 (LOWER QUARTER LEFT: 1/2 WIDE)
DEREK standing in front of the chalk board squats down to pick up the metal crate
PANEL 4 (LOWER QUARTER RIGHT: 1/2 WIDE)
DEREK stands up holding the metal crate easily.
PANEL 1 (UPPER QUARTER LEFT: 1/4 WIDE)
Close-up of the crate being set down.
PANEL 2 (UPPER QUARTER RIGHT: 3/4 WIDE)
DEREK and GRACE standing in front of a brick wall with a glass and polished metal door built into it. The door has a horizontal push bar. Above the door is a spray painted 11. GRACE has a hand truck, and a clipboard with paperwork.
Wish me luck.
Just try to aim for a potted plant or something.
PANEL 3 (CENTER HALF LEFT: 1/4 WIDE)
DEREK grabs the door handle, and takes a deep breath.
PANEL 4 (CENTER HALF LEFT MIDDLE: 1/4 WIDE)
The door opens on a marble floor weak early sun making it glow slightly orange. In the distance a reception desk is visible. A CHINESE RECEPTIONIST sits behind it.
PANEL 5 (CENTER HALF RIGHT MIDDLE: 1/4 WIDE)
From inside the lobby the open door is visible (left). The atrium is large with tall windows displaying the skyline of the city, with the rising sun hitting the tops of the buildings. DEREK sticks his head through the door to check for pedestrians
PANEL 6 (CENTER HALF RIGHT: 1/4 WIDE)
DEREK comes through the door carrying the hand truck.
PANEL 7 (LOWER QUARTER LEFT: 1/2 WIDE)
Back in warehouse. GRACE sets the clipboard on top of the metal crate as DEREK picks it up.
DEREK LOWE (Clenched Teeth)
PANEL 8 (LOWER QUARTER RIGHT MIDDLE: 1/2 WIDE)
Inside Lobby DEREK waddles in legs akimbo carrying the metal crate.
PANEL 1 (UPPER QUARTER: FULL WIDE)
Han Industrial Lobby DEREK drops the metal crate onto the hand truck.
PANEL 2 (TOP CENTER QUARTER LEFT: 1/4 WIDE)
First person view DEREK looking at a sturdy looking stainless steel and dark wood reception desk with the CHINESE RECEPTIONIST behind. His hand is visible holding out a manifest.
DEREK LOWE(TRANSLATED FROM CANTONESE)(O.C.)
Good morning. I have a special Worldwide Express delivery for Mr.Zhào. If you can direct me on where to leave it.
CHINESE RECEPTIONIST (IN ENGLISH)
I’m sorry sir I don’t speak the southern dialect. Who did you say your package is for?
PANEL 3 (TOP CENTER QUARTER LEFT MIDDLE: 1/4 WIDE)
First person close-up view of DEREK from the CHINESE RECEPTIONIST’s angle. DEREK is visibly embarrassed eyes now locked on his clipboard.
Ahh. Sorry, this package is for Mr.Zhào. Where should I leave it?
PANEL 4 (TOP CENTER QUARTER RIGHT MIDDLE: 1/4 WIDE)
First person back from DEREK’s pov. CHINESE RECEPTIONIST looking at her computer with a confused expression.
Sir? Our system shows your agency only took receipt of this package yesterday afternoon. How were you able to get it here from San Fransisco so quickly?
GRACE EVANS (CAPTION)
How’d they take it in Shanghai?
PANEL 5 (TOP CENTER QUARTER RIGHT: 1/4 WIDE)
First person view of DEREK from the CHINESE RECEPTIONIST’s angle. DEREK is now looking at the CHINESE RECEPTIONIST with a disarming smile.
DEREK LOWE (CAPTION)
Time zone change threw off the receptionist. She was impressed we managed it in under 13 hours, but she didn’t catch on.
I really couldn’t tell you. Fast planes I guess. Also, they keep me on a very tight schedule so if you could…
PANEL 6 (LOWER HALF: FULL WIDE)
Wide shot of the sunny lobby atruim with the CHINESE RECEPTIONIST and DEREK by the desk(right).
Of course. If you will bring it around here I will have someone from security come for it.
Thank you. Do you by chance have a publicly accessible restroom?
PANEL 1 (UPPER THIRD LEFT: 1/4 WIDE)
DEREK is standing in front of a sink in a well appointed public restroom. He has unbuttoned the top of his grey jumpsuit, and his business shirt and tie are visible beneath. He is reaching into the jumpsuit to pull out something.
PANEL 2 (UPPER THIRD MIDDLE LEFT: 1/4 WIDE)
Close-up DEREK pulls out a bundle of black fabric.
PANEL 3 (UPPER THIRD RIGHT: 1/2 WIDE)
DEREK has unrolled the bundle on the bathroom vanity. Laying flat two handles and a zipper are visible. Laying on the unrolled gym bag are a digital camera and a thick worn canvas covered notebook.
PANEL 4 (CENTER THIRD LEFT: 1/2 WIDE)
DEREK has picked up the camera and is taking a length-wise photograph of the door into the bathroom.
PANEL 5 (CENTER THIRD MIDDLE RIGHT: 1/4 WIDE)
Close-up of the notebook in DEREK’s hand revealed to be a photo album. the tile says “Our Trip to Ted’s Jungle Safari”
PANEL 6 (CENTER THIRD RIGHT: 1/4 WIDE)
Close-up the open album one and a half pages are visible the half page (left) is a white wooden door with an oval frosted glass window above a set of brick steps and a shrub. The full photo is a heavy duty wooden office door set into a metal frame.
DEREK LOWE (To Himself)
Grain runs vertical, looks like maple. Brushed nickel handle, matching kick-plate no visible scratches on handle or at the floor… ok.
PANEL 7 (LOWER THIRD LEFT: 1/4 WIDE)
Close-up of the jump-suit pooled around DEREK’s ankles. DEREK’s regular suit pants are visible, and the shoes are dress loafers
PANEL 8 (LOWER THIRD MIDDLE LEFT: 1/4 WIDE)
Close-up of DEREK stuffing the jumpsuit into the small gym black bag.
PANEL 9 (LOWER THIRD MIDDLE RIGHT: 1/4 WIDE)
DEREK’s hand pulling the restroom door handle. This door is very similar to the one in the photo. Through the crack at the side (left) we can see yellow light pouring through.
PANEL 10 (LOWER THIRD RIGHT: 1/4 WIDE)
PANEL 1 (FULL HEIGHT: FULL WIDE)
DEREK, Still in the restroom, jumping back from the door. He is terrified. The door is open and there is nothing on the other side. A deep black nothing it seems to almost be pushing through the opening trying to ooze in around the edges.
PANEL 2 (LOWER THIRD RIGHT: 1/4 WIDE)
The door slams shut.
PANEL 1 (UPPER QUARTER LEFT: 1/4 WIDE)
Close-up of DEREK’s terrified face.
DEREK LOWE (To Himself)
Keep it together. You are fourteen thousand miles from home. You have to get back to Mr. Han before the people start getting curious. Open the door back to San Fransisco, and when you’re done you can take a break.
PANEL 2 (UPPER QUARTER MIDDLE LEFT: 1/4 WIDE)
Close-up of DEREK splashing his face with water from the faucet.
PANEL 3 (UPPER QUARTER MIDDLE RIGHT: 1/4 WIDE)
DEREK standing in front of the door taking a deep breath.
PANEL 4 (UPPER QUARTER RIGHT: 1/4 WIDE)
Close-up of DEREK’s hand on the handle. As before yellow light comes in at the crack
PANEL 5 (LOWER THREE QUARTERS: FULL WIDE)
Inside of a bland office hallway, multi-color utility carpet. Painting of a horse over a side table with a potted plant (right). There is a reception area at the end of the hall, and an open door (left).
PANEL 6 (LOWER QUARTER RIGHT: 1/3 WIDE: INSET TO PANEL 5)
DEREK sticks his head into the hall and takes looks around.
PANEL 1 (UPPER RIGHT; HALF WIDE; SLIGHT COVERAGE PANEL 2)
Close-up on DEREK LOWE’s mouth against a slighly pink sky
Well Mr. Han despite the minor stress your package put on our system. Worldwide Express has been able to successfully transport your package to Shanghai.
PANEL 2 (TOP CENTER QUARTER; FULL WIDE)
Wide interior of MR. HAN’s large office. The sky has the pink tinge late afternoon, and approaching sunset. MR. HAN (left) is standing behind his desk. DEREK remains in his leather chair (right).
Are you trying to tell me Mr. Lowe, that your company was able to take my item from here to Shanghai in just over three hours?
No sir. I had to wait almost an hour to get back in and see you. Worldwide Express completed your delivery in just under two hours. Feel free to call and check.
PANEL 3 (BOTTOM CENTER QUARTER;FULL WIDE)
MR. HAN still standing now with a phone held to his ear. DEREK sits comfortably in the leather chair.
PANEL 4 (LOWER LEFT; 3/8 WIDE; PARTIAL COVERAGE PANEL 3)
Close-up MR. HAN placing his phone back on the receiver. His face is a carefully schooled mask.
This is quite impressive feat Mr. Lowe. My organization would be very interested in using your service regularly going forward.
PANEL 5 (LOWER RIGHT; 3/8 WIDE; PARTIAL COVERAGE PANEL 3)
Close-up DEREK LOWE’s mouth sly smile.
Certainly Mr. Han. I must warn you however that we will be unable to repeat the sizable delivery we took today. As I said the weight puts a strain on our infrastructure. I accepted your generous offer today because it had the added benefit of showing you what Worldwide Express is capable of, but in future our 20 kilogram limit will be strictly enforced.
GRACE EVANS (CAPTION)
And I’m guessing by that smug look that Han signed off on a contract?